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I’ve been sitting on this material for a long time (since July) but never got around to tidying it up.  I also wasn’t sure how to present it.  Now that I’ve putzed around enough, finally did something about it and here you go.

Anyway, the background is that I really enjoy the TV show “24” and one night in July I actually dreamt up something rather “24”-ish starring my friend Yongfatt.  So I got onto gtalk the next day to chat with him and to try and get some continuation.  

To preserve the integrity of a truly original brainstorm session, what I’m going to do is cut and paste our dialog here.  It will however be very messy ala chat style but hey you guys have used all sorts of instant messaging apps so this will be cool.  And bear in mind that there is a certain time lag in IM, so you’ll see some responses to some comments a little later than expected. 

So I’ve tried to organize it a bit but here’s quick brief:
- What I say is in black.  Yongfatt’s speech is in red.  
- There are these times in the dialog i.e. 9:22AM and so on – these are the real time indicators of our chat.  Not the “24” ticking clock – that will be in blue.
- The dialog has been broken up in paras or 1 min real time.
- What you read below has been edited a little, but 95% of what you read below is the original text.  

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9:22AM me: it starts of with all of us being at this fun fair at night... then suddenly somebody tells us we have to pass an important message to jack forrestor's parents aka Mr. and Mrs. Forrestor...

9:23 AM me: can't remember what the message is, but anyway, you and i go hunting for it.
somewhere along the line, we pick up this sweet little girl... think young version of (that girl from War of the Worlds... what's her name) young kid, the carry-in-arms-without-aching-too-much type.
9:23 AM me:so we go searching around the fun fair, checking out every alley, and closed doors we end up in this facility... very clinical looing
9:23 AM me: looking, i mean
and as we look into each of the windows of the rooms, we see people in various states of some kind of disease...

 

9:24 AM me: there's one room with people (who look healthy) sitting around... they're either doing research, or test patients...
then there's another room with people lying in beds and nurses and docs attending to them
then there's another room which is empty, but there's another door in it.

 

9:25 AM me: (of course, all this while we have no idea what mr. and mrs. forrestor look like)

since we're still recce-ing the place, we decide to check out this 3rd room, so we go in...

9:26 AM Yongfatt: so we are looking for someone whom we dun know looks like what?
me: this man with boils all over, pus-sy and red-watery-eyed looking guy walks out
Yongfatt: call chloe to send it to us on pda lah
me: he sees us, and shakes his finger at us, kinda telling us to go out then we realize this is some infectious disease facility..

 

9:27 AM me: and then we have to tell the little girl not to scream... because you know how dakota fanning can scream the shit out of people
then we realize that we may be infected if we stay too long, so we quickly leave the room
we go back to the first room with the seemingly healthy people and then i see 2 acquaintances from secondary school

 

9:28 AM me:  anyway, we wait till they come out (for recess break i think) and then we try to get their attention.
Yongfatt: you are mixing all your friends together in this episode
me: but then the doctor/supervisor is coming out too, so can only talk briefly...
Yongfatt: you continue telling the story. got make a call i really dun want to first me: ok

 

9:29 AM me:  we ask about mr and mrs forestor...

9:30 AM me: and then they say they have some vague idea but not really sure... then the doctor comes, he sees us and then you tell the little girl and I to hide... but you don't... then i woke up

 

9:31 AM me: dammit i don't know what happens next i want to go back to sleep but then i have to go to work but i think that's where you start doing jack bauer stuff like whipping out a gun, telling people to stand down.

 

9:32 AM me: maybe you take the doc hostage... torture him and stuff
i was so sure something exciting/jack-bauer-ish was going to happen...
then i had to wake up so, that's it... sorry for the incomplete story...
you can go dream the ending tonight then you can tell me what happens

 

9:35 AM me: if it helps, here are some details to help create the setting:  
1. all the patients and nurses in the facility are wearing blue scrubs... 
2. the fun fair is at night.

9:36 AM me: 3. the fair is really huge.. like the Singapore Exhibition Halls...
but held on the streets, the fun fair stands line the buildings, the roads are only about 2 lanes wide
the building are more like shop houses... that's why there's little alleys...
mostly caucasian people

 

9:39 AM Yongfatt: so it's not china.
russians?
or americans?

 

9:40 AM Yongfatt: and why am I carrying the little girl with me on such a mission.
why did you wake up?!!?!?!?!?!?

 

9:41 AM me: i think it's set in america... bioterrorism would be my call
not sure where the bad guys are from
see, the thing is... the message we have to pass is irrelevant... in trying to pass the message, we discover this huge thing going on

 

9:42 AM me: maybe you can drop the girl later on... but for time being you have to handle her... it's like those small distractions in 24 too right?

 

9:43 AM me: as for chloe... she's not in the picture yet... and even if she were, she could only tell us the headcount/number of bodies in the building and where... but can't tell us what they're doing... plus this is a hidden facility so she doesn't have access to security cameras inside turns out the doc is son of the forrestor

 

10:01 AM Yongfatt: girl is their grand daughter.
doc is captured bec he discovered some super duper virus... spread by brain waves...
the guy thinks it and the person he thinks of kena (translation of ‘kena’: gets hit and dies)

 

10:02 AM Yongfatt: the message we have to pass is that their daughter in law is the mastermind
me: wah lau.. that's a fierce man.. (translation of ‘wah lau’: oh man!)
i mean, that's fierce disease man
Yongfatt: but she pretend to be victim and captured like them
so the message is that the mr and mrs forrester have to be careful and we will get them out

 

10:03 AM Yongfatt:  but unknown to them, this dakota fanning girl is a clone... not the real granddaughter
this clone has the brainwave thing

 

10:04 AM Yongfatt:  but she doesn't know how to use it yet...
real daughter already dead from testing

10:06 AM Yongfatt: finally gets pda to work and chloe emails all these developments... about the daughter being a clone and the brainwave virus
we console the doc...

10:07 AM Yongfatt: tell him to get back to work and he will go get his parents then they will meet again for extraction before the airforce napalms the whole fun fair
06:00:15 (ala the ticking clock in “24”)

10:12 AM Yongfatt: finally locates forrestors...
you take them both to north airfield using the pda
me: why is the doc is immune to the virus..? 
i'm sure people think about killing him...

Yongfatt: using the gps thingy that Mr. Trees passed you before he returned to singapore
doc is immune bec he is creator

10:13 AM Yongfatt: he has the master virus
me: or maybe he already has the vaccine
Yongfatt: so the plan is to bring him back to CTU... and extract the virus from his blood
problem is how to do it without him finding out

 

10:14 AM Yongfatt: but as we deal with doc we realize he is the good guy
he is developing the virus so that he can develop vaccine to prevent people from misusing
his wife is the baddy
she is plotting to use virus for bad
she also doc and she is coldblooded

10:15 AM Yongfatt: like how she killed her daughter accidentally
but no remorse
just a cold "oh well"
and she clones another one
diabolical

10:16 AM Yongfatt: 06:23:18 (ala ticking clock)
We meet at airfield and contacts extraction team
engine problem and they are still 17min out we are too open

 

10:17 AM Yongfatt: at this time only forrestor and doc
me: wah lau... how can there be an engine problem? what kind of lousy helicopter is this? which country made it? Yongfatt: doc wants to take dakota but she's only a clone...
a evil clone by the way.
you finally manage to persuade him to leave her behind and come with you to airfield

 

10:18 AM Yongfatt: maybe india i dunno but got problem lah

 

10:19 AM Yongfatt: so we go into building 4 to hide and discover doc is actually good guy... so no need to forcibly extract virus from him which is good bec he would have brainwave us dead

 

10:20 AM Yongfatt: so after talking and talking, we realise he is good
but don't tell him CTU plan to extract virus yet.
because president wayne palmer says so.
me: i hope we escape soon because the moment all the patients turn on us, we'll die immediately...
Yongfatt: then gun shot and doc is hit
me: who shot the gun?
Yongfatt: the pus and bloody patient

 

10:21 AM Yongfatt: he somehow followed you and doc to airfield bec you wearing shiny diamond earrings and he likes shiny things

 

10:22 AM me: what are you doing? fixing the engine?
Yongfatt: i shoot back and pus explodes coating us all with greenish yellow gook
we give each other the yieow look but starts tending to doc

 

10:23 AM me: but i don’t know first aid..
Yongfatt: problem is shoots gave away our position searchlights come on swinging all over
me: yeah, then all the patients some how come charging out..  ready to send brainwaves
Yongfatt: control tower spots our chopper then it's like all hell breaks loose.

 

10:24 AM me: then chloe arranges for major electromagnetic wave over the area to jam all waves.. including brainwaves... so we are saved from virus
Yongfatt: i go outside to recce and sees hell breaking loose
me: you better start shooting them
Yongfatt: then I see a Ford Expedition
missing driver's side wing mirror

 

10:25 AM Yongfatt: i get in and hotwire it...
vroom
chopper under attack...
i vroom into warehouse
me: then we quickly zao in the ford expedition (translation of zao: escape)
Yongfatt: trust me... by this time you know first aid

 

10:26 AM Yongfatt: but doc is not doing well
put him in back of expedition and we all load in.
bullets flying and we lose windows and windscreen glass all over

me: 06:59:59.. to be continued
Yongfatt:  that's right.. stay tuned for scene from our next episode

10:27 AM Yongfatt: ads selling 2008 Ford Expedition comes on
then something from Wal Mart
and the irritating Empire Carpet
AT&T long distance

10:28 AM Yongfatt: Credits roll at top left corner of screen, we see Ford driving out main gate of fair

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Of course there was talk about doing this again but we somehow never got the inspiration again.  We also talked about sending in the script to the producers of “24” – we think we have at least 1 hour of action in here.  But we didn’t do that either.  But if you ever see any episodes of “24” that bear any resemblance to what has been described here, you know it came from us.  

(And in case you were wondering… no, Mr. Trees did not give me any GPS thingy before he left for Singapore. )